Friday, 10 February 2012

Butterfly Feet - The Fairy Ring Writing Contest

Mommy had told me not to go back to the stream, but how could I resist? Now, all wrapped up in a thick coat, a scarf wrapped tightly around my neck and mittens on my hands, I stood at the edge of the tinkling water hoping to see her again. It had not being my fault earlier today when I’d fallen into the stream.
“I promise Mommy, I saw her, I saw her!” I had protested as she had stripped me of my wet clothes.
Mommy just smiled. Although I am only 11 I knew she didn't believe me.

But I know what I saw and I know I’m wasn't mistaken.

The little dancing fairy had been skip skip skipping across the stream. Her little butterfly feet barely touching the water. Her green dragonfly wings buzzing and I’m sure she was laughing. Laughing at me.
But what was so funny and was that singing I could hear? It had not being my fault I wanted to get closer and touch her little body, to gently lift her in my hand. Little firefly lights twinkling all around me, almost like a dream. But I knew she wasn’t a dream, this beautiful green winged fairy that appeared to be laughing at me.

And then, Splash! And all was gone. The green fairy dancer and the fireflies instantly disappeared. There was nothing but me, dripping wet and spluttering and Mommy shouting and running over, enquiring if I was ok.
I know now that I will come back here, as many times as I must, long after I’ve grown up and am as old as Mommy. And maybe one day I will see her again, the dancing fairy, skipping over the water and laughing at me.



Matthew Vance Lannigan said...


I really liked this story! You did a great job capturing the voice of an 11 year old child.

(You're not eleven, are you? /LOL)

Bernadette Davies said...

Hahahaha perish the thought!
Thank you so much Matthew for your kind words. Did you notice how you and I both had similar ideas with our submissions?

Mark Koopmans said...

Aloha Bernadette,

Thanks for the comments and *it's* awesome your daughter digs "our" era :) I'm a new follower :)

Bernadette Davies said...

Why thank you kind sir. Loved your posting, I was off to Youtube and started listening to Tears for Fears and Depeche Mode and it's all your fault! Am now a follower of yours too :)

SJIHolliday said...

That's lovely, could picture the scene. You definitely got the voice of an 11 year old :)

Jane Isaac said...

This is truly magical, Bernadette. My daughter is almost 11, and I can hear those words coming out of her mouth. A wonderful story,Honey. I wish you all the best with your entry:)

Donna B. McNicol said...

Sweet little story...definitely believable. Thanks for sharing.

Becky Fyfe said...

This was really beautiful! I love that it's written from the perspective of an 11 year old. :)

Unknown said...

Bernadette, thank you so much for entering! A very joyful little story with well-described details :)

Bernadette Davies said...

Thank you so much for all your positive feedback. It means so much ♥♥♥

The RambleInn said...

I loved that only the child saw the fairy. Isn't it the children that are always the observant ones? Lovely post!

Bernadette Davies said...

Thank you Dee for stopping by and your lovely comment. Children do turn the world magical :)